Dear Prof Brad Blackstone,
I am writing to introduce myself to you. My name is Peck Shien, and I am a Year 1 Civil Engineering student at Singapore Institute of Technology. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic in 2023 with a diploma in civil engineering, which provided me with a solid foundation for my degree. I am particularly interested in facade engineering, where precise measurements and structural safety are critical. This field allows me to focus on technical accuracy and ensure building facades are durable and compliant with safety standards. Beyond academics, I enjoy cooking and baking, which has taught me to be proactive and detail-oriented. When I come across a new recipe or dessert, I act on it immediately, honing my ability to adapt quickly, manage resources efficiently, and maintain precision. These habits align with the process-driven mindset required in engineering, where accuracy and careful execution are essential.
One of my strengths is my ability to listen actively and reflect on different viewpoints, which helps me think critically and approach problems thoughtfully. However, I sometimes struggle to express my thoughts clearly, especially in discussions, which can make effective communication challenging.
Through this module, I aim to to improve my ability to articulate ideas more clearly and confidently. I hope to develop communication skills that help me express myself effectively in both academic and professional settings.
Thank you for taking the time to read this email. I look forward to learning and improving throughout this module.
Yours Sincerely,
Kho Peck Shien Read Eliz, Sandra, Khad's letter
Dear Peck Shien,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your introductory letter. It provides a clear and engaging overview of your background, strengths, and aspirations. Your interest in facade engineering and the way you connect baking to a process-driven mindset make your letter stand out.
Your strength in active listening is well explained, and your awareness of challenges in expressing yourself shows maturity and a desire to improve. Adding a brief example of how your listening skills or communication struggles have played out in specific situations could make your points more relatable.
Your goals to enhance articulation and communication skills align well with the module’s focus. Highlighting how these skills will benefit your academic and career journey would add depth.
Overall, your letter is thoughtful and well-written. I’m confident you will achieve your goals and grow through this module.
Best regards,
Zhanyuan
Hi Zhanyuan,
DeleteThank you for your thoughtful feedback on my letter. I’ll work on adding specific examples of my listening skills and communication challenges to make my points more relatable.
I also appreciate your suggestion to highlight how improving my communication skills will support my goals. Thank you for your valuable feedback and encouragement.
Best regards,
Peck Shien
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ReplyDeleteHello Peck Shien,
The letter is well structured, with a clear flow from introduction to your goals for the module. I appreciate the personalised touch by connecting your hobbies to engineering skills.
I have some suggestions for improvement. Firstly, there is a minor grammatical error: "I aim to to improve" should be corrected to "I aim to improve". Secondly, adding a specific subject line to the letter to clearly indicate it's purpose.
Overall, this letter is well thought and written with in a professional tone.
Best regards,
Kenji
Hi Kenji,
DeleteThank you for your feedback and suggestions. I appreciate you pointing out the grammatical error and suggesting a subject line to enhance clarity. These are valuable insights, and I will make the necessary improvements to refine my letter.
Your encouragement and detailed suggestions mean a lot, and I’m grateful for your support.
Best regards,
Peck Shien
Hi Peck Shien,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your introduction letter. It was well-written, organised and concise, with the use of tenses consistent throughout. It is interesting to know your passion for this field in facade engineering since your polytechnic days. I like how you link your hobbies to engineering. For example, the process-driven mindset that you acquired while cooking/baking. Additionally, I can relate to your weakness of not expressing your thoughts during communication. Maybe you can add an illustration of the situation when you are not able to express your thoughts. Overall, I hope you are able to achieve your goals throughout this module.
Best regards,
Sandra
hi zhiguang,
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking your time to review my introductory letter and for providing such thoughtful and constructive feedback. I truly appreciate your kind words and insightful suggestions.
I’m glad that my academic background and interest in facade engineering came through clearly, and I’m pleased that my connection between cooking and engineering resonated with you.
Your suggestion is helpful and I will work on making these adjustments to enhance the readability and flow of my letter. I am also grateful for your encouragement regarding my goal of developing stronger communication skills.
Best regards,
Peck Shien
Hi Zhiguang,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comment.
Hi Sandra,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind feedback and thoughtful suggestions. I’m glad you found my letter organised and engaging, and I appreciate your connection to my process-driven mindset from cooking and baking.
Your suggestion to include an example of a situation where I struggled to express my thoughts is very helpful, and I’ll work on adding that to make my letter more relatable. Thank you for your encouragement, I am excited to work towards my goals through this module.
Best regards,
Peck Shien
Dear Pek Shien,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this well developed, clearly articulated and informative letter. You address the points of the brief very well.
You share, for example, about your interest in engineering and focus on facades in particular. I appreciate learning about how you see precision and safety as important values.
You also share on your interest in cooking and baking, and again, the word precision appears as you tie the skills and values of your hobby with those of your chosen profession. I especially like this thought: "These habits align with the process-driven mindset required in engineering, where accuracy and careful execution are essential."
In your letter, you also explain something about your comm skills and your module goals, and I see a clear connection. What I really appreciate here is the link between what I see in terms of your attitude and behaviour in class and what you want to achieve. You're making the module real!
In terms of your language use, this letter is an excellent effort.
I look forward to getting to know more about you this term.
Best wishes,
Brad
Hi Prof Brad,
DeleteThank you for your kind and encouraging feedback! It motivates me to continue applying precision and care in all areas of my work and learning.
I look forward to engaging more deeply with the module and achieving my goals.
Best Regards,
Peck Shien